Bonsoir , pouvez vous s'il vous plait corriger mon texte en Anglais ? ( je sais qu'il est très long ,) vous pourriez raccourcir des phrases tout en traduisant ,

Bonsoir , pouvez vous s'il vous plait corriger mon texte en Anglais ? ( je sais qu'il est très long ,) vous pourriez raccourcir des phrases tout en traduisant , mais il faut que mon texte soit cohérent. Je dois utilser le préterit , faire 150 mots.
Merci beaucoup de votre courage et de votre volonté
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As soon as his pirates tried to lift me up, I quickly defended myself and took my weapon and killed them violently as they did with my friends, I was really furious, that some no longer dared to come near me. The rich captain had his eyes elsewhere, without worrying that I had murdered some of his companions because he thought I was no longer there.


But I proved that I was alive by discreetly running towards him, without him seeing me, and pierced my sword through his back. He screamed with a painful scream and fell to the ground. I cut off his head, blood spurted out from all sides. I threw his cursed head into the water. I went straight to the basement, there were young girls locked in the dark place, tied up, mistreated. I set them free. They thanked me.

Further on, in an illuminated room, I found many wonderful objects: gold, silver, diamonds, jewelry that belonged to Queen Anne... I was blown away by all this wealth! I took with me everything I could.


Unfortunately, my dear friends were deceased, so I could not share the treasures with them. I was deeply saddened to have lost them, but at the same time, happy to be able to bring back treasures to my family.