Bonjour donc voila j'ai fait ce texte moi meme et je craint que j'ai fait des erreur pouvez vous me le corriger merci beaucoup le voici: The doll with evil nail
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Bonjour donc voila j'ai fait ce texte moi meme et je craint que j'ai fait des erreur pouvez vous me le corriger merci beaucoup le voici: The doll with evil nails On October 31, a little girl and her parents went to a toy store. She lived in a big house with her whole family. The girl fell for "love at first sight" for a doll dressed all in white with long purple nails. She begged her parents to buy it for her and they did. At the cash register, the lady tells them to lock the doll in a closet. However they forgot ... and the next morning, when she woke up, the little girl discovered her father in tears. He showed her his dead mother and the little girl saw one of her doll's nails in her body ... and closely inspecting she saw that the doll bought the day before was missing. She did not try to deepen the subject. But the next morning his father announced the death of his aunt ..... and her doll had only eight nails. She began to be suspicious. Then came the death of his uncle - then more than seven nails plus the death of her grandfather - and this continued happening until there were only three nails left (left of her family remained only her cousin, his father and her) then she threatened to throw her doll to the bottom of the sea. The doll / demon replied in a dismal voice "If you do that, you'll see what you'll see! " The girl, too frightened, did nothing else. But two days later, her father and cousin died. There she did not hesitate for a moment and threw the demon with all her strength. The night that followed the doll come back and killed her mistress, and the doll swore that all the next little girls who will live in this pavilion will have a curse. Since no one lived in this house, a sign was written. A few years later, a large family wanted to settle in the house. In this family there was also a little girl ...
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1. Réponse lolflamiaou
Je ne suis pas très fort en anglais (13 de moyenne environ)
Mais je ne vois pas de faute pour le moment